My Immortal Revisited: Now With Commentary

Not the most original idea, but I was incredibly bored one night. I have tried and tried to do this so many times through different outlets, but I could never bring myself to finish because my sanity wouldn't allow it. But now, viola! I have started this four-day monstrosity, and I am going to finish it this time! This work will be rated 'T' because of my ridiculously foul mouth.